As a business administration student, I was trying to figure out why Michael Williams, a music store selling compact discs, collapsed. Judging from some information, I concluded three main reasons. Firstly, there have been two large music stores in the neighborhood, which are 3 miles away from the store. It is very competitive that in a small place are three music stores. Secondly, according to the graph of residents’ age, most of people are middle-aged, while the CDs Michael Williams sold are almost hip-hop and rock, which hasn't actually caught on with mainstream customers. Thirdly, the business hours opposites with the time crowds walk by. Learned from the survey, few people walk past the store from 12p.m. to 6p.m., when the store only opened, from 1p.m. to 5p.m., and that’s why the traffic was low. Due to these elements, I could understand why Michael Williams ended up closing his store and that if we want to run a business, it’s better to investigate the qualities of the inhabitants in advance.
應該沒有什麼錯誤~
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應該沒錯吧 :D
回覆刪除1.Thirdly, the business hours opposites with the time crowds walk by.
回覆刪除﹡opposite不能當動詞。
2.Learned from the survey, few people walk past..., when the store only opened, from...
﹡我想把when換掉,因為翻起來怪怪的…whereas會比較好嗎?
﹡大致上寫得挺好的。
以上,淺見…
opposite不能當動詞嗎?
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基本上.....
就醬
沒有錯阿
回覆刪除most of people are middle-aged
回覆刪除of後面是不是要加個the?
(不確定:|)
the business hours opposites with 這裡opposite不能當動辭哦
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