A dream I have had was a touching one. It was about me and a boy who was the most popular boy in my class.
My classmates and I went to the department store, and so was he. While I was shopping with my friends, he talked to me again and again. Although I admired him, I didn’t want to have a love affair. Later, he came to chat with me when I was alone. During the conversation, I escaped for the excuse of going to restroom and didn’t go back. After walking alone for a while, I still went back for discomfort. However, he was not there anymore. With regret, I searched all the floors but didn’t saw him. Several hours later, I finally found him at the top floor. On seeing me, he rushed to me and held me tight. I felt like saying something but only to find my tears rolling down my cheek. Not until the moment did I realize that I liked him very much.
最後第四行saw應該要原形
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回覆刪除基本上只有上面那個問題吧
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回覆刪除看起來好像沒問題了欸...
回覆刪除那我要說什麼???
妤如文章好棒喔
回覆刪除找不出問題^^
如果我是妳－－
應該會很開心哈哈
好瘋狂的男孩XD
My classmates and I went to the department store, and so was he.這邊應該是SO DID HE哦
回覆刪除I escaped for the excuse of going to restroom 這裡RESTROOM前面應該要加THE哦
哈囉~妤如:
回覆刪除我很喜歡妳的故事耶!
第二句要改成so did he
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我盡力了!
還有謝謝妳的意見 =目
1.My classmates and I went to the department store, and so was he.
回覆刪除→My classmates and I went to the department store, and so did he.
2.With regret, I searched all the floors but didn’t saw him.
→With regret, I searched all the floors but didn’t see him.
3.Not until the moment did I realize that I liked him very much.
→這個是結論句嗎- 0 -?
(以上，淺見…)
對不起。
回覆刪除讓大家見笑了。＞ˇ＜
謝謝大家看完。
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大家都改完了O_O
回覆刪除故事很好看，前面平平原來有伏筆(?!)
結論或許可以多寫點。