Excuse me. Could you do me a favor? My friend and I are traveling in this country, but now we are separated. And I have to find her. Her name is Patty, Patty Yao. She is five feet three inches and average weight, about seventeen years old. In addition, her skin is white, just like new moon; plus, her cheeks are baby pink. Moreover, she has big pure black eyes as ink and rose pink lips. Her hair is straight, black, and shoulder-length yet little is gray. Especially, a handful of left side of her hair is dyed wine red. Last, her voice sounds gentle and like a nightingale. Have you seen such a girl? If so, please tell me where you see her.
She is five feet three inches and average weight這具文法好像不太對耶
回覆刪除其他應該都還不錯=)
建議可以描述一下他的穿著
回覆刪除然後應該沒什麼問題吧 :D
1.She is five feet three inches and average weight, about seventeen years old.
回覆刪除→She is five feet, three inches and average weight; moreover, she's about seventeen years old.
2.Her hair is straight, black, and shoulder-length yet little is gray.
→little is gray，這部分有種說不上的怪，但我也不曉得怎麼改…另外，個人覺得前面加個連貫性的副詞會比較通順…
3.If so, please tell me where you see her.
→我看到了她了…妳的聯絡方式呢… - A -?
痛苦的comment時間又到囉^_^
回覆刪除衣著部分可以多描述一些((黑袍嗎xd
感覺這個人很美呢:)
回覆刪除有描述穿著的話
回覆刪除應該會更好找到吧！^^
可以在加服裝的描述(思
回覆刪除都沒有錯誤真的事件很可怕的是(驚
可以多描述穿著
回覆刪除恩....